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Old September 21, 2012, 10:33 AM   #11
Spats McGee
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I just did a quick once-over. I have just a few suggestions.

First paragraph: Your first paragraph refers to "the current media bias in favor of more gun control rather more crime control . . . " That should read "the current media bias in favor of more gun control rather than more crime control . . . "

Second paragraph: You have an extra comma after the word "few" that needs to be removed.

Third: Change the first sentence from "Restrictions and/or" to read "Restrictions on . . . " As it stands, you have "and/or" appearing twice in the same sentence. For that matter, I'd get repace and/or simply with "or." Get rid of the "and" before "semi-automatic."

Fourth: " . . . . defense of their lives . . . . " Strike the comma after "Amendment."
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